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Nowadays, it is more convenient and easier for people to travel to other countries. it is positive or negative devlopment.

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These days, it has become very easy to
travel
 overseas and a
person
 can
travel
 anywhere in the world safely because today multiple institutes help a
person
 with the visa process. It is a very positive thing because
people
 can get knowledge about foreign cultures. Nowadays,
people
 want to go abroad for many reasons
such
 as tour and study. Youngsters are going abroad the study and develop themselves and it is better for them.
For instance
, when a young boy completed his 12th
then
 he likes to
travel
 to another country because of new technologies and extraordinary education system for that he improves his English language so it is a positive side for them to learn a new language.
Furthermore
, pupils can get more knowledge, information, and knowledge about the foreign culture so a
person
 can develop their thinking abilities.
According to
 recent, surveys
people
 are more successful who left their home country and it is true when a
person
 leaves their house and struggles he has a high chance of success in his personal life.
Besides
 the advantages, there are a few drawbacks that
people
 face atmosphere problems.
For example
, India is a hot country but Canada is cold so
people
 can not adapt atmosphere and it is hard to adjust.
Additionally
,
people
 can
also
 face communication problems because of different languages.
To conclude
, with the help of technologies
person
 can
travel
 anywhere in the world easily but they have to face communication and cultural problems.
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