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“Prevention is better than cure” Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventive measure To what extend do you agree

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It is argued by many that scientific research on the cure for illness is too expensive and it would be better to spend
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 money on preventative methods.
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 essay completely disagrees with the statement. Even after taking preventative ,measure there is a possibility of getting infected by a disease.
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, in order to eliminate the possibility of getting infected would require the whole population to take preventative measures. On one hand, there is always a chance of being affected by a disease even after taking preventative methods.
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 it may seem that prevention makes us immune to all diseases, people still get infected by many diseases.
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, crowds who wore masks outside their homes and practised social distancing were still unfortunate to test positive for COVID-19.
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, the possibility of getting everyone in society to take preventative measures is negligible.
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 is greatly owing to the fact that many ignorant people will build controversies and spread misinformation to other communities.
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, during the
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 many people believed that drinking orange juice every day will make them immune to the coronavirus.
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 what has been said above, taking any amount of caution will never be enough to stay safe from illness. With a global population of more than 8 billion, can one person think that everyone will take precautions? Even if everyone takes caution, there will still be a small population whose infection will not be curable.
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 justifies the need for research and technology when it comes to immunology and diseases.
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