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Research shows that business meetings, discussions and trainings are happening nowadays. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

#research #business #meetings #discussions #trainings
Business
 meetings, discussions and
train
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 closest often happened, in my
opinion
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advantages
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 more
then
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 disadvantages, let me tell you my reasons. In fact, everyone
come
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to
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different
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 family,
live
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 and
learning
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, so we have
different
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 way of mind, in
business
 we need standardization
everything
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,
was
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so was
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 every customer can feel
same
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the same
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 service quality.
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, when you go to
McDonalds
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McDonald's
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, you got a hamburger unglued and
coke
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Coke
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 insufficient the cup, you will feel the service was blow out the water and swear never go to
the
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any shop of
McDonalds
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McDonald's
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, if everyone same with
this
 experience, I believe
McDonalds
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McDonald's
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 will collapse
of
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fast, but that’s not
business
’s reasons of found. So, in
the
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business
 use meeting, discussions and training
,
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 can be able
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center
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 everyone’s consensus, when
business
 consensus created the company
possible
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 go fall
a way
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away
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. In my
live
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life
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, I worked 24 hours shop, MOS hamburger and a
just opened
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convenient
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convenience
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 shop; I can memory about the
convenient
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 when I worked
at
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there, you can hear
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a customer
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customer
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customers
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 complain
at
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every
day
, but why other
business
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businesses
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 can get
complain
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complaints
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 every
day
,
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 because in the
business
 we have
simple
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a simple
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 language, we know each other, but in tiny
business
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 they didn’t the systems, so often make trouble in every
day
. To summarize, I hold any meeting, discussions and
trainings
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training
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 can
kept
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keep
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business
 standard is important, if not standard every flow thing, have one
day
 will
got
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get
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 giant trouble like health or damage, so happing and
center
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centre
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 consensus
form
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from
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meeting
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meetings
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 and
condition
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conditions
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 are important.
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