Some people believe that it is a good idea that older people continue to work if it is possible for them to do. Do you agree or disagree?

Majority
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are of the opinion that elderly individuals should continue to be in
service
so far
they
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as they
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have the ability. I strongly agree with
this
as it will provide them
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opportunity
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opportunities
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to relate with people
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the
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society and reduce
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the risk
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of depression. I will explain
this
further
with good examples and give a logical conclusion. Senior citizens should be allowed to keep their jobs if they are capable because rendering one or two services bring about social interaction.
While
rendering a
service
an aged individual
communicate
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  and there is
a
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feedback, some clients met during
this
process tends to like them and they can from there become friends.
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, a grandmother in the United State found her new intimate friend that she usually spend quality time
with
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during her course of
service
,
hence
, rendering
service
is beneficial.
Moreover
, being in
service
lower
risk
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the risk
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of depression among aged citizens. Elders are prone to depression
due to
the process of
aging
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ageing
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as a result
of
decline
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the decline
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in the activities of some hormones within human
being
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beings
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when they are inactive. When an elderly man or woman is busy with activity,there will be no room for loneliness  which can give rise to
medical
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a medical
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problem
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problems
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.
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sixty year
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man who is always involved in
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job, preparing for his classes,won't have time to think excessively or be depressed,
thus
, being active is important. In conclusion,
i
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believe that taking part in
daily
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a daily
the daily
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activity at
place
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the place
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of work if
there
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strength is there for
elderly
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the elderly
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should continue because it
help
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helps
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them to continue to be involved in
happenings
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the happenings
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around and
rate
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the rate
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of  depressed citizens will reduce.
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