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improve the standard of living through economic development,however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages

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Many countries pay more attention to improving the standard of living through economic
development
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, but some
people
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 think social
value
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 is lost
as a result
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 when the countries choose to improve through the
development
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 of the economy
instead
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 of improving the social
value
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. I think it both has advantages and disadvantages. I will talk about the reason in
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 passage.
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, economic
development
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 was the most important thing for most
people
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, and as the result, they lose social
value
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. Good economic growth can make local
people
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 a wonderful living environment to think about the importance of social
value
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. Some countries resident surround by war year after year. After the war ended, they would not think about the importance of social
value
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. They just want to have enough money to rebuild the social facilities.
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 means the standard of living only can get increased economic
development
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. It can bring something that can be seen and touched by
people
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 even if it means losing social
value
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.
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, I think social
value
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 only can bring satisfaction to a few
people
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, they don't need to care about hunger and homeless even unemployment When they get enough fortune, they will start a church on social
value
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 to improve their standard of living to full of their spirit world.
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, some legendary film stars will take part in volunteering and charity to help the poor and the homeless. It seems that
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 behaviour will be good for both the rich and the poor. It is like a trade, the rich can get spiritual satisfaction by giving physical help and the poor order the good emotion to the rich when they have physical satisfaction. In conclusion, for the vast majority, the core of improving the standard of living is economic
development
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, but after getting wealth, humans will try to chase social
value
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 to increase their living standard to keep their feeling well. So I think do like
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 both have advantages and disadvantages since they can't live together during society's
development
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.
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