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As the number or cars increases, more money has to be spent on road systems. Some people think the government should pay for this. Others, however, think that drivers should cover the costs. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#cars #increases #money #road #systems #people #government #drivers #costs
These days opinions widely diverge on who should be responsible for the maintenance of road systems.
The
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 number of people
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 that governments ought to tackle
this
 problem,
while
 others argue that it is the liability of
car
 commuters. In
this
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 both of these views will be elaborated and will be given an explanation
why
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 I tend to agree with the former opinion.
To begin
 with, it is evident that with the proliferation of
automobiles
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 the quality of
roads
 needs
a
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regular care and repair. As soon as*1, (comma is not needed)
car
 drivers are the main users of highways, they are considered as an underlying reason
of
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this
 issue.
According to
this
, by the point of numerous people*2,
car
 commuters ought to spend some parts of their income
to
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 the renovation and expansion of
roads
.
Therefore
,
fixing
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 the way they drive,
car
 owners understand the whole process of refit and
while
 commuting to and from work, they will take
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control
the
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 speed and the condition of their vehicles.
For instance
, in Vietnam
car
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 drivers pay taxes for the maintenance of highways, which costs 40-50% of
car
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 price.
On the other hand
, it is undeniable that underlying problems of
country’s
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 infrastructure
is
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 one of the duties of authorities.
Hence
, in order to encourage the citizens’ standard of living the government should shoulder
this
 responsibility themselves and repair
roads
 with tax money. All
car
 owners pay
the
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taxes every month and it would be unfair
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 if to insist
them
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to
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spend their cash
for
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renovation
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 of
roads
. It would be a cause of
driver’s
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 rebellion. To illustrate, five years ago the residents of Thailand made a revolt, but it was put down after 2 days.
To sum up
, even though
car
 drivers appear to be the main utilizers of highways, authorities ought to take the responsibility for the expansion of all
roads
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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