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Some people believe that nowadays we have too many choices. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #choices
In
this
 day and age, there is a wide range of options available including restaurants, educational institutions, and retail stores.
Hence
, there is contention over whether our society has too many selections to opt for. I disagree with the view of too many choices in today’s modern society, as it can bring a great deal of benefits to our lives
such
 as enhancement of the responsiveness to customers’ needs and the quality of products.
To begin
, broadening available options could
fulfill
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 a diverse number of people’s preferences, improving people’s
overall
 satisfaction. Taking Australia as an example, in which people who have various backgrounds
such
 as Asia, Europe, and South America, there are distinctive differences with regard to their preferred food, and some people might only choose a certain type of food adhering to their religion and belief. If
this
 is the case, a wide range of selections can accommodate these different needs responsively.
Therefore
, not only can the majority of ethnic groups’s needs be met, but it will
also
 be able to ensure the other’s.
Additionally
, having too many options would
also
 elevate the quality of goods and services, as it will create cut-through competition among businesses.
For instance
, looking at a selection of mobile phone services, multiple companies have been competing with each other, resulting in lowering the price range, amplifying the capacity of data, and adding novel functions to appeal to prospective customers.
This
 trend would often lead the companies to install more satisfying features, providing a wealth of benefits to us. In conclusion, I believe that having a broad real of choices in our lives could have positive impacts on our lives, as there would be a prospect of more sensitively fulfilling various customers’s needs
as well as
 promoting a high-quality service.
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coherence cohesion
Be sure to structure your essay clearly. Your introduction and conclusion are evident, but ensure that individual paragraphs are also well-organized with clear topic sentences and that ideas flow logically from one to the next.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples. While your essay addresses the prompt, try to provide more detailed examples to illustrate your points more effectively and enhance the persuasiveness of your argument.
task achievement
Your response to the task is complete, but you could further improve by ensuring that your ideas are not only clear but also thoroughly explored and comprehensive. This may involve delving deeper into the implications of having many choices, or possibly acknowledging and refuting opposing viewpoints to strengthen your own position.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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