The diagram show how chocolate is produced
The given diagram clearly illustrates the way in which
chocolate
is manufactured.
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Overall
, it is obvious that the process consists of ten stages, beginning with raw material and ending up with pressed liquid Linking Words
chocolate
.
First of all, the cacao tree is grown in America, Africa, and Indonesia. When red pods are fully ripe, pods are harvested. Use synonyms
Then
white beans which are placed inside of red pods are collected. Linking Words
Then
, harvested white beans need to ferment, and Linking Words
then
they spread under the sun to dry. After drying, they are put into large bags to pack, and they are shipped to a Linking Words
chocolate
factory to be Use synonyms
chocolate
products. In that process, they are transported by train or lorry. In the following stage, the fermented white beans are roasted to a temperature in the range of 350 Celsius. After the roasting process, they are crushed to get off the outer shell. Use synonyms
Finally
, the inner parts are crushed to make liquid Linking Words
chocolate
.Use synonyms
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