Many government think that economic progression is their most important goal. Some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People
have different views about economic
progression
is most important for
government
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the government
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whether
people
think education, health care, infrastructure and so on
progression
are same significant
as well as
economic development. I believe authorities should
focused
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focus
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both
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on both
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of them. There are a number of reasons why I think government should focus on
others
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other
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sides.
To begin
with, the construction of schools, hospitals, roads etc help the
country
turning
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into a developing nation because
people
will get
education
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an education
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, treatment and other facilities and
then
will work more
country
's prosperity.
As a result
,
people
will not move
other
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to other
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countries for these facilities and the
country
will not replace
into
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apply
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the lack of intelligence
people
. Another reason is that it will help to improve financial problems. If the
country
develops various types of sections, other states will interested in that
country
's amenities which will help them to earn an amount of money from those sectors.
For example
, India has well education and health care which is why every year 70% of
people
come to Indiana from
another countries
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another country
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for study and treatment and these help to boost the economy of India.
However
, economic
progression
has a variety of positive sides. First of all, the
country
can solve their problems without taking any help from other countries
due to
having
the
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a
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huge of
fund
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funds
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for economic development.
For instance
, America does
no
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not
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need any help if they have any crisis. As they have a lot of money , they can easily tackle the problems without international
helps
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help
bits of help
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. What is more, the developing
country
's
people
can lead a modern and luxury
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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for their
country
's well-being and individuals enjoy the facilities.
For example
, the well economic
country
will offer their employees high salaries
as well as
will
able
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be able
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to provide contemporary lives which is why that
country
's
persons
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people
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can
fulfill
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fulfil
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basic needs. In conclusion, my opinion is that if
administration
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the administration
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improves other types of progress , the
country
will automatically get
the
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apply
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economic
progression
. So government should focus
both
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on both
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sides.
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