Some people think the government should subsidize fruit and vegetables to make healthy food more affordable. Other argue that the government should tax unhealthy food instead. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays some
people
believe that in order to increase the affordability of nutritious foodstuff, the authority ought to provide subsidies for fruit and vegetables,
while
according to
other
people
's
opinions
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it is better when unhealthy sustenance is taxed by the
government
. In my opinion, taxation of unnutritious
food
is the easiest way to direct the population to healthy eating way, but
this
cause other problems, so the contribution to organic
food
is the only right option for the administration. In the
last
few years, most products contain pesticides and insecticides and chemical fertilizers which are correspondingly harmful to our bodies.
Although
, in spite of
the
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organic produce
is
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more expensive than that which is grown using modern conventional methods, a great many
people
start to buy them to stop filling themselves and their children with toxic chemicals.
Furthermore
, in some
countries
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there
is
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two more issues which
leads
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to poor diet - poverty and famine. The inhabitants of
such
counties are not able to bear the expense of greens.
For example
, in countries where is a shortage of
food
the price of products is 2 or more times higher,
as a
result
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residents eat only what they can find.
However
, the
government
can not help the citizens by donating fruit and vegetables because it is obvious that most
people
prefer junk
food
instead
of a natural
meal
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. To clarify, the majority of us have a busy life and do not have time to prepare a meal which is harmless for our health, and
that is
the reason why we grab something from the supermarket. So the administration should work on new methods of quicker access,
instead
of focusing only on
subsidy
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. Another thing, the inhabitants suggest the
government
should do is to tax convenience foodstuff and
this
idea has 2: good and bad sides. In fact, taxation is really efficient.
For instance
, by avoiding the payment
people
tend to consume naturally grown produce.
On the other hand
, there are
also
people
who can not pay the duty and do not have money for non-modified nourishment.
Subsequently
, these all will conduct to the hunger of the public.
To sum up
, the fruit and vegetables we eat are very important
for
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us and the
government
try
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to subsidize them to make them reasonably priced,
also
, there is no need for a fee, if we will watch what we consume.
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