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Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#governments #money #railways #roads
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It is widely believed that
government
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 should invest
on
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railways
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 rather than
road
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roads
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.
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 essay to shed
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 on the reason why
i
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 completely
agree
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this
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 point of view
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 with,
government
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spent
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money
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 on
railways
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 can relieve the burden on the national budget in general. To explain, in order to invest
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railways
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government
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wil
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will
 undoubtedly have to spend a massive amount of
money
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 on a wide range of categories
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 as paying for staff,
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 new facilities or maintaining and upgrading old amenities annually.
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 can become a waste of
tax payers
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taxpayers
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money
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, especially when
railways
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able
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 to
by
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government
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. Personally, I opine that
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 public
money
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 should be invested in more important sectors namely healthcare and education with the purpose of improving the living quality of the general public. It is even better for
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 to be spent solving alarming problems with the most typical example being the covid 19 pandemic that has plagued many countries all over the world including
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 nam by raising the spectre of economic crisis for them
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 to
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,
government
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invest
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on
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railways
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 can
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 have a positive impact on
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society as a whole. There is no denying that in light of the
government
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money
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 saving expected in the
pervious
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previous
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 paragraph, they will be able to increase other crucial
expenditure
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, especially the spending on supporting the poor.
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 of
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, the poverty rate n many parts of the world, especially in the countries where
railways
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 are highly popular, will witness a
noticable
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noticeable
 fall in the long run.
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 might
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encouraged
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 other social problems
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 as the level of crime to decrease dramatically
there by
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 worsening the living quality of the general public. In conclusion, it seems to me that
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government
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 spent
money
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 which has
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beneficial to the world economy and the entire society.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Carbon emissions
  • Mass transportation
  • Traffic congestion
  • Economic growth
  • Regional development
  • Initial investment
  • Feasibility
  • Flexibility
  • Rural areas
  • Integration
  • Sustainable
  • Efficiency
  • Infrastructure
  • Commuters
  • Public expenditure
  • Autonomous vehicles
  • Long-term investment
  • Accessibility
  • Connectivity
  • Modal shift
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