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A magazine wants to include contributions from its readers for an article called 'The book that influenced the most' Write a letter to te editor of the magazine about the book that influenced you most. In your letter - describe what this book was about - explain how this book influenced you - say whether this book would be likely to influence other people

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to contribute my views on an article called 'The
book
 that influenced the most' of a magazine. I would like to tell you about a
book
 named "MS Dhoni - The
indian
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 wicket-keeper". I read
this
book
 twice, and I like the story of
this
book
.
This
book
 is about
the
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a
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 cool man, who is
wicket-keeper
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the wicket-keeper
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 of the Indian team and How he becomes
a
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the
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 captain of
Indian
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the Indian
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 Team.
Additionally
, it
also
 covers the struggle of him, and how they take decisions in harsh situations. I like
nature
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 of MS Dhoni because he takes all decisions from his heart, not from
mind
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his mind
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.
This
 kind of nature I admired a lot.
Moreover
, he always talks with
others
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 players without becoming angry, which I like to do in my life. Based on my experience, I am likely to say
this
book
is influence
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to
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other people
most
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the most
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. They can learn something from it and
able
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 to follow it. Thank you for giving me a chance to describe one of my favourite books. I hope people may buy it and see themselves as a new man. Yours faithfully, Milav Soni
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

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