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Band 8.5

A friend of your is thinking of going om a camping holiday for the first time this summer . he has asked for your advice. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter -Explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday. -Describe some possible disadvantages. -Say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

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Dear friend, I’m writing
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 letter to you in order to provide you with some advice which I learnt from my previous experience of camping since I heard that you are planning to do that
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 summer. First of all, I am sure that will enjoy
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 a new experience and you will never forget it, as you will be switching off from your daily routine life and moving to a self-independent lifestyle.
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 that, you cannot imagine how you feeling will be when you breathe fresh air or drink a pure or wake up early morning to spectacular natural scenery.
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, you should not forget to take with you some essential items like insecticide, wet wipes, a GPS device, a torch, and
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 but the least a portable toilet. The only disadvantage that you should consider in your account is that you may be more exposed to a high risk if you don’t take care of yourself. Unfortunately,
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 my previous commitment to my family, I will not be able to join with a wonderful experience and I wish you all the best. Truly yours,

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Development
To enhance the letter, try to expand on the disadvantages of camping with more specific examples, as this aspect felt briefly covered compared to the benefits.
Accuracy
Consider proofreading to correct minor errors ('you feeling will be' should be 'your feelings will be', 'pure' seems like it might be missing a noun after it, 'join with a wonderful' could be revised to 'join you in this wonderful') to ensure clarity and precision in your message.
Tone
You did an excellent job of expressing enthusiasm and support for your friend's camping trip, which makes your letter very encouraging and positive.
Structure
The structure of your letter is clear, with a natural progression from introduction to advice, then discussing advantages and disadvantages, and concluding with your availability. This logical flow makes your letter easy to follow.
Tone
You've used a friendly and suitable writing tone throughout, effectively addressing the task's requirements while keeping it personal and engaging.
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