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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents today are more involved in their children's education than were parents in the past. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays
kids
 are receiving more involvement from
parents
, earlier
parents
 didn't focus on
kids
'
education
. The present
education
system
 has great change from books to digital platforms,
Usually
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 children get distracted from internet sources, as there should be an eye on them by
parents
. In earlier days
parents
 were not much educated nor were able to guide their
kids
 in their
studies
. So they use to send them to the extra classes provide by the school or they would send them to tuition for the betterment of their
studies
. As per the
last
 ten years of ,study the
education
system
 was dependent upon private tuition classes,
due to
 which students achieved good results in their curriculum.
This
 would give a better impact on schools and educational organisations by over best result for their students. As of ,now the present
education
system
 has changed a lot with the help of technology and
due to
this
 educational platforms provide digital mediums to study.
This
 latest educational platform requires mobile, tablets and personal computers for
studies
. These three devices have an important role in creating child development, which positive aspect which our
education
system
 undertakes for learning on the other side it has a negative aspect which
kids
 can automatically move into it examples gaming, movies, chatting platform, and watching porn.
Due to
this
parents
 should give involved in their child's
education
. Consent can help, guide and teach them in a better way. Children get nature and habits through
parents
' involvement. A recent, study by Oxford University that
parents
' interaction in ,
kids
'
studies
 has improved their skills and level of understanding. In conclusion, adults should give their valuable time to the
kids
 in their educational carrier.
Due to
this
kids
 will achieve a better
education
 and carrier in their life.
Kids
 get easily approached by their
parents
 and receive a better role from mentors.
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