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you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ● explain what happened when you phoned the shop ● say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing
this
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 letter to inform you about the broken air fryer that I purchased from your store
last
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 week. I was thrilled when I purchased
this
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 air fryer
of
Change preposition
from

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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starfrit
Change the capitalization
Starfrit

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 company for $150 from your store. As soon as I reached home, I
pluged
Correct your spelling
plugged

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it
to
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in to

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 use it for cooking the chicken in it. Everything was ready and I put the chicken in it and on the timer of 20
mintues
Correct your spelling
minutes

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at 450 degrees, but after 20
mintues
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minutes

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when I opened it my happiness
turns
Wrong verb form
turned

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb turns. Consider changing it.

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 to sudden misery as
meat
Add an article
the meat

The noun phrase meat seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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 was still raw.
Although
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 the timer was on, as it was showing green light
but
Remove the conjunction
apply

It appears that the word but is unnecessary in this sentence. Consider removing it.

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it
has
Wrong verb form
had

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb has. Consider changing it.

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 some internal
problem
Fix the agreement mistake
problems

It seems that problem may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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due to
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 which it was not working. I called the store and explained
them
Change preposition
to them

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 the
hole
Correct your spelling
whole

The word hole doesn’t seem to fit this context. Consider replacing it with a different one.

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situtation
Correct your spelling
situation

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,
I
Correct word choice
but I

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did not
got
Change the verb form
get

It appears that the verb got is incorrectly used with the helping verb did. Consider changing it to the base form.

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 any positive response from them.
Furthermore
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, they blamed me that it might be my fault that I had not handled it with care. I asked for the
managers
Change to a genitive case
manager's
managers'

It appears that the word managers should use the genitive case. Consider changing the noun.

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 contact number but they refused and said it was not in their policy to provide
Correct article usage
the managers

It seems that there is an article usage problem here.

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managers
Change noun form
manager's

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 phone number. I got quite upset by communicating with your employee. I request you
for
Change preposition
to

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 either
replacing
Wrong verb form
replace

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb replacing. Consider changing it.

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 my product, or I would like to get my refund. I have attached the bill of purchase with
this
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Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

 letter. Looking forward to
hear
Change the verb form
hearing

The verb hear is usually in the gerund form when following the word Looking forward to. Consider replacing it with the -ing form.

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 from you. Yours sincerely ABC

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Grammar and Spelling
Ensure that you carefully proofread your letter to correct any spelling mistakes (e.g., 'plugged' instead of 'pluged', 'minutes' instead of 'mintues', 'whole situation' instead of 'hole situtation'). Accurate spelling is important for clarity and professionalism.
Transition and Flow
While your letter effectively conveys the message across three clear paragraphs, consider adding more transition phrases between paragraphs to improve flow. This will enhance the readability of your letter and make your argumentation even stronger.
Detail and Specificity
Try to provide more specific details when describing problems or your desired resolution. For example, you could state a desired timeframe for the resolution or mention any inconvenience the issue has caused you, to make your request more compelling.
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