you recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter ● describe the problem with the equipment ● explain what happened when you phoned the shop ● say what you would like the manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am writing

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letter to inform you about the broken air fryer that I purchased from your store

last

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week. I was thrilled when I purchased

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air fryer

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starfrit

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company for $150 from your store. As soon as I reached home, I

pluged

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plugged

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in to

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use it for cooking the chicken in it. Everything was ready and I put the chicken in it and on the timer of 20

mintues

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minutes

at 450 degrees, but after 20

mintues

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minutes

when I opened it my happiness

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to sudden misery as

meat

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was still raw.

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the timer was on, as it was showing green light

but

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has

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some internal

problem

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due to

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which it was not working. I called the store and explained

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to them

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the

hole

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whole

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situtation

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situation

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but I

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did not

got

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any positive response from them.

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, they blamed me that it might be my fault that I had not handled it with care. I asked for the

managers

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contact number but they refused and said it was not in their policy to provide

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the managers

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managers

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phone number. I got quite upset by communicating with your employee. I request you

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either

replacing

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my product, or I would like to get my refund. I have attached the bill of purchase with

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letter. Looking forward to

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from you. Yours sincerely ABC

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Grammar and Spelling

Ensure that you carefully proofread your letter to correct any spelling mistakes (e.g., 'plugged' instead of 'pluged', 'minutes' instead of 'mintues', 'whole situation' instead of 'hole situtation'). Accurate spelling is important for clarity and professionalism.

Transition and Flow

While your letter effectively conveys the message across three clear paragraphs, consider adding more transition phrases between paragraphs to improve flow. This will enhance the readability of your letter and make your argumentation even stronger.

Detail and Specificity

Try to provide more specific details when describing problems or your desired resolution. For example, you could state a desired timeframe for the resolution or mention any inconvenience the issue has caused you, to make your request more compelling.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

225 words

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