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All careers have their benefits and drawbacks .And being professional artist. discuss both views and give your opinion

Undoubtedly, it is an essential part of our life to use social media in order to communicate with people.
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what social
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 are used by
teenagers
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 in Zetland for communication, I have found some relevant data in a pie chart that I am going to comment on.
According to
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 the pie chart, the majority of the surveyed chose Instagram(33%) as the most preferable social
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 for communication among adolescents.
On the contrary
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, the least popular social
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 is
twitter
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, not more than a third of
teenagers
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 use it(3%). It is
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 worth mentioning that social
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 as
snapchat
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(32%) is a bit less than Instagram, the difference between them is only 1%. It is not
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due to
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 their convenience in
using
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. Another important thing to mention is that social
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 as
facebook
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(5%) is slightly six times less than
tiktok
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TikTok
(27%). It seems that
teenagers
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 like communicating and sharing videos at the same time. One problem that can arise is that people can get addicted to social
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 and it can cause
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bad consequences. The best way to tackle
this
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 problem is
planning
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 your time with
benefit
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 before using
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social
networks
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. In conclusion, I would say that social
networks
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 are important for modern
teenagers
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: they help to communicate with people or study, keep in touch with parents, etc.

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