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Social media brings positive impacts for our life. Do you agree or disagree ?

#media #impacts #life
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this
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 big
effect
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effects
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social
media
. Social
media
 can bring all the
information
 that we need when just open it. It is totally agreed that social
media
brings
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positive
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a positive
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 impact
for
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on
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 our
life
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. Now we can
reach
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access
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 all
information
 easily
by
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through
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 social
media
,
while
 in the past
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information
 was very difficult to get because of
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technology.
First,
All the positive or negative
information
 in the world now is very easy to find
because
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because of
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 the power of social
media
. For
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people
are
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now want to find
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information
 about the good news in the world, the people can find it or just open
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social
media
 and search
all
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for all
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 the good news around the world. It is very simple to reach the
information
 that we cannot find in the past.
As a result
, all the
information
 is
easily
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easy
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 to find now using
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social
media
.
Second,
the
information
 in the past
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little
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 bit difficult because
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social
media
 is not
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 as it is now.
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 as, in the past
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information
 just
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 from
newspaper
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newspapers
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, television, and radio
while
 now
everywhere
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we can get
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information
from
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just looking the
media
 social.
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 the end, the
information
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according to
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In conclusion
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, all the
information
 can easily
find
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be found
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 using social
media
while
 in the past
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it was
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a
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little bit difficult.
It is clear that
 social
media
brings
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positive
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a positive
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 impact
for
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on
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 our
life
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lives
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. After
through
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this
 analysis, the
information
 will be easily spread
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depending
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of
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on
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the
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technological
development
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developments
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such
 as social
media
.
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