Most countries want to improve standard of living through economic development,however, others think social value is lost as a result. Do you think the advantages of economic development outweigh the disadvantages?

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. Some of them have
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different
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to improve
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of living and the way that government could take
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economic
development
. By improving economic
development
, the government in some countries hopes it could make
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change
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living.
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improving economic
development
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negative effect.
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, social
value
. Here, I will explain the problem
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as the effect of
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economic
development
. To start with,
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economic
development
aims to elevate the standard of living among the communities and has the purpose to improve the quality of living in
country
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the country
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. The reason for improving
standard
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the standard
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of living
to
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is to
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mitigate the poorness in
community
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the community
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and to
rise
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the money
value
in
country
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the country
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.
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, the developed
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economy
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in
country
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has
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positive impact. To illustrate
this
, the tourist from other countries has the interest to take
vacation
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a vacation
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in
developed
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the developed
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country
since the developed
country
have the proper accommodation and facility.
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advantages
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developing
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the economic
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economic
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,
on the contrary
, it could have disadvantages which appear as
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economic
development
.
For instance
, social
value
. Social
value
is the issue
as
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the effect of
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a growing
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in
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economic
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economy
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. People with
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greater
economy
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economic
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condition tend to
loss
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lose
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the respect in community as they think that they are not
in
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on
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the same level and the norms could be devasted as
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result of
this
improvement. In conclusion, Economic
development
has many
advantage
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to make better in a nation and attract the tourist from other countries to visit. Meanwhile, the social
value
problem could appear as
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development
even though
that is
not a big deal as the developed economy could surpass the disadvantage and increase the
money
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monetary
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value
.
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