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The arts, including art, music and theatre are considered to be important in the society. Do you think the arts will still have a place in amongst our modern lifestyles? Should the arts be included in the school curriculum?

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, melody and theatre are known to be very essential in
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society. In my opinion,
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 is still very essential in our modern lifestyle because our daily activities revolve around
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 encompasses a lot of areas in our modern lifestyle because it includes theatre, melody, and
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 . As an individual, Our daily activities revolve around
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, Listening to artistic melodies, and watching movies are all artistic aspects of our daily lives.
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, People who drive to work in the morning will listen to music to prepare their minds for their daily routine and when returning back they listen to a melody to ease the stress from work.
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, the
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 is still very important in our modern lifestyle because it revolves around them.
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 are an aspect of life that has a lot of varieties and
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. Art has a way of encouraging
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 to learn more.
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, A literature lecturer can draw an illustrative aspect of the story he is teaching to make it appear simpler for
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 to assimilate ànd understand what they are been taught. These and many more are the ways art can improve the learning
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syllabus
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 In conclusion,
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society and they are still very critical in our modern lifestyles because it revolves around our daily activities. They should be added to
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 because they will improve
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Aesthetics
  • Cultural heritage
  • Empathy
  • Creativity
  • Expression
  • Innovation
  • Intellectual stimulation
  • Empathy
  • Fine motor skills
  • Well-rounded education
  • Accessibility
  • Preservation
  • Screen-centered
  • Storytelling
  • Balance
  • Artistic mediums
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