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Some people believe that globalization has a negative impact on local culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globalization has had a number of advantages for
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 in small sub-cultures from all over the world since the
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 decade. Some
people
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 believe that
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 issue has disadvantages more than its benefits. In
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 group. Globalization brings opportunities and innovations to the whole world, especially for those who live in small cities far from others. A lot of job vacancies were created
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 as administrator and social media manager so
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 can be hired. These jobs are dependent on
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;
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,
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 must update their knowledge about that.
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 is one of the best achievements of humans during
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 growth. It makes connections easier and faster for human beings from any nation. Media is another achievement of becoming globalized and it is more common to use among young
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. It can inform everyone about political events, scientifical events and social ones from the other sides of the earth in less than one hour.
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, if a revolution happens in France,
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 in Iran will understand the news of that at that moment. As
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can be seen in our modern lifestyle, the more
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 use
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, the more their lives become easier.
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,
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 who opine that the negative aspects of
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 development are numerous do not have any reasonable logic behind their opinion. They just have some fear about changing their traditions and religious ideas which have ruled in their region for a long time
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, it is difficult for them to gain a new extension which is not even
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 with their previous one. I think these
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 who do not accept anything new in their lives can be called “techno-phoebe” because They stuck to their old-fashioned lifestyle;
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, they think if anything new
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, media,
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 enters into their daily routine, they cannot continue living with peace. In conclusion, I agree that the positive points of globalization are more than its negative aspects.
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,
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 should acclimatize themselves to new innovations and developments. If they refuse to adopt
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them, they become losers in their professional career competition scene.
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