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Some people believe that globalization has a negative impact on local culture. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Globalization has had a number of advantages for
people
 in small sub-cultures from all over the world since the
last
 decade. Some
people
 believe that
this
 issue has disadvantages more than its benefits. In
this
 essay, I will depict in detail why I disagree with
this
 group. Globalization brings opportunities and innovations to the whole world, especially for those who live in small cities far from others. A lot of job vacancies were created
such
 as administrator and social media manager so
people
 can be hired. These jobs are dependent on
technology
;
thus
,
people
 must update their knowledge about that.
Technology
 is one of the best achievements of humans during
this
 growth. It makes connections easier and faster for human beings from any nation. Media is another achievement of becoming globalized and it is more common to use among young
people
. It can inform everyone about political events, scientifical events and social ones from the other sides of the earth in less than one hour.
For example
, if a revolution happens in France,
people
 in Iran will understand the news of that at that moment. As
it
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can be seen in our modern lifestyle, the more
people
 use
technology
, the more their lives become easier.
On the other hand
,
people
 who opine that the negative aspects of
this
 development are numerous do not have any reasonable logic behind their opinion. They just have some fear about changing their traditions and religious ideas which have ruled in their region for a long time
therefore
, it is difficult for them to gain a new extension which is not even
in contrast
 with their previous one. I think these
people
 who do not accept anything new in their lives can be called “techno-phoebe” because They stuck to their old-fashioned lifestyle;
moreover
, they think if anything new
such
 as
technology
, media,
smartphones
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 enters into their daily routine, they cannot continue living with peace. In conclusion, I agree that the positive points of globalization are more than its negative aspects.
moreover
,
people
 should acclimatize themselves to new innovations and developments. If they refuse to adopt
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them, they become losers in their professional career competition scene.
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