The bar chart shows poverty rates by sex and age. They are from the United States in 2008.
The graph describes an annual economic struggle in America in 2008. The data is measured by percentage and categorized by sex and
age
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Overall
, women had higher poverty rates than men. Linking Words
Moreover
, the number of problems amongst the girls was decreasing in accordance with the older their Linking Words
age
become. Use synonyms
However
, the same trend was experienced in the opposite sex trend with just lower figures.
First of all, poverty rates that women suffer from at the Linking Words
age
of 65 until 74, which has half of the children's rate, have the same amount of economic struggle as the ages 45 to 59. Based on the chart, the figures experienced a gradual fall the more they get older. Use synonyms
However
, there was a rise in the Linking Words
age
60-64 calculated but Use synonyms
then
decreased eventually.
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Secondly
, the economic problems in the boy's view compared to the girls had a slightly smaller gap with less than 1% measured at the Linking Words
age
0 until 17 but Use synonyms
then
started to have a large gap compared to the Linking Words
age
18 and older. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, the individuals on their 75 Linking Words
age
had a ratio of 1:3 respectively compared to the children under the Use synonyms
age
of 5.Use synonyms
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