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An increasing number of children are overweight which could result in term of their health and healthcare. What do you think why so many children are overweight. What is to be done to solve this problem

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Obesity is the one main problem for all our
children
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 if we can not control some of the unhealthy
food
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 it will cause to overweight and health issues. We need to learn a balanced diet so we can maintain a healthy lifestyle.
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 with, parents need to focus on their
children
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 on the healthy
food
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 that they eat. Nowadays juveniles can eat whatever they want if we can not control it will cause health problems.
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,
children
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 go bigger because of the cholesterol that they get from unhealthy
food
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 and junk foods or eating outside.
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, parents need to educate their
children
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 about the healthy
food
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 that they will eat.
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,
food
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 is more important to our kids but we need to remember the value of a balanced diet so the
children
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 will not be overweight and become healthy.
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, diet is most important to our
children
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 and guidance by the parents to bring more healthy.
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