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The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts detailed below give information about the police budget in 2017 and 2018 in on area of Britain. The table illustrates where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The given table and charts illustrate information about the budget for two different years in
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 area of Britain.
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, In 2017 and 2018 the highest budget came from the national government. The lowest was other resources in two different years. The highest money spent was on salaries, and the lowest was on technology. In 2017, money came from the National government
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of 175.5m and increased to 1778.8
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 in 2018.
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, Local taxes in 2017 gave 91.2
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 and rose to 102.3m in 2018. In 2017 other resource spending was 38
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 and slightly rose to 28.5m. In 2018 all sources experienced
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. The charts show in 2017, the highest spending was on salaries at 75% and in 2018 decreased to 69%. The technology spent 8% in 2017 and rose to 14% in 2018.
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, Building and transport experienced no change in two years. In 2018 salaries were increased. The technology fell, but building and transport were stable.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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