The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.

The graph below shows information on employment rates across 6 countries in 1995 and 2005.
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of the working sectors
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6 countries in 1995 and 2005.
Overall
, there had been a surge in employment rates from 1995 to 2005, for both males and females.
However
, in 2005, more men were being hired compared to women in all countries. In the year 1995, there were generally less than 50% female workers, except for Switzerland and the UK. Only around 25% of females were making an income in Australia and New Zealand. In the year 2005, the rate of employment of women increased by at least 10%, reaching heights of close to 70% in Switzerland.
Furthermore
, the most dramatic rise took place in New Zealand, which achieved more than 40%. The average rate of employment of males in 1995 is approximately 60%,
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was lower than those of females in Switzerland,
UK
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the UK
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and
USA
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the USA
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. In 2005, there had been a major rise in the percentage of
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men, soaring up to more than 80% in Iceland, which was the highest compared to other countries.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economic indicators
  • comparison
  • trends
  • improvements
  • declines
  • anomalies
  • fluctuating
  • economic policy
  • financial conditions
  • technological advancements
  • educational levels
  • standards of living
  • poverty rates
  • well-being
  • implications
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