Some people believe that it is important to spent alot of money on family celebrations while others believe it's a waste of money. Discuss both views

Most people see family celebrations as a big deal because family means alot to them and they spend alot of
money
in  it,
while
some people see
this
as a waste of expenses.
Although
this
can make them run out of cash thereby reducing savings which can lead to debt  and not able to meet demands, but can be fun and can help uniting the family.
This
essay will explicate these with relevant examples and a logical conclusion. To start with, family includes father mother, children, uncles, aunties, grand parent related by blood. Most individual feel it's a waste of expenses spending much cash on family
party
. In my opinion I believe its important to unite the family by organizing a family celebration,
this
will make family relations have a memorable time together and
this
can only b possible when lot of
money
is spent on the get together event to make it worthwhile and always a day to remember.
For example
: a family
party
that should be memorable must involve music, theatre, foods and drinks and
money
can only make
this
possible as
money
answereth to all things.
Although
this
can decrease their savings if much fund is involved and can even put them in debt.
For instance
: family members who have been saving to pay their house rent would end up using the
money
for
party
and might even end up borrowing because of the high demand of the
party
.
Furthermore
, The coming together of family relations increases the love they have for each other.
For example
, family members who live in different places who have not seen each other for  over 5 years will want to come for the event, which will make the family bond strong again which involves funds. Spending much currency on occasions can make  someone to run out of cash to be able to meet up to basic demands
such
as feeding, clothing etc.
While
spending less fund on a event like
this
will make one to have enough savings for any emergency or situation that may arise. The occasion will come and go but the debt
as a result
of the elaborate reunion
due to
extravagant spending will still remain. In conclusion, it is advisable that
while
preparing for celebrations people should learn to cut their coat
according to
their size, which means we shouldn't spend more than our abilities.
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