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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatments #doctor #development
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Today,more and more
people
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 are trying to choose alternative
medicines
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 or treatments when they have a disease rather than see a doctor.I think it's a negative development nowadays. On the one hand,when
people
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 have
health
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 problems,it's dangerous to solve that by themselves through eating
medicines
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 or treatments.
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,doctors who have abundant knowledge in their specific domain can give patients a precise indication of how to overcome these difficulties.If
people
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 who get ill judge these troubles by themselves,maybe they do not determine whether they are right and eat bad medicine,which will cause terrible results.
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,it's hard for
people
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 to know whether the medicine is match their illness.
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,if you get a headache,you can't judge the reason is blood pressure or head,so it's hard to choose what kind of pill to eat.
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,doctors can give you an entire treatment to make sure you can have a minimum effect to secure your
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 and treat your difficulties.Generally speaking,there are eight years from university to hospital and doctors need a master of degree at least,which causes them to learn a large number of theory knowledge.When facing the same
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 problem,they can analyze which part of your body is wrong and give you an integrated treatment plan,not only
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 for your pain but
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 exercises to make sure you have a strong life against bacteria.Even sometimes they will give you a suggestion that only exercise can solve the problems and do not need any pills. In conclusion,it's better for
people
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 to seek the help of a doctor rather than alternative
medicines
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.If
people
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 go to their usual doctor frequently,they will have real
health
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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