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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or coeducational schools. Some people think that children going to single sex schools have disadvantages later in life. To what extent do you agree?

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It is commonly argued that children attending single-sex
schools
 will be at a disadvantage in the long run. Personally, I can neither agree nor disagree with
this
 statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree with the opinion that co-ed
schools
 provide better preparation in life for kids.
This
 is because they allow for opposite-gender interactions to occur, mimicking what the real world has to offer. It's through these interactions that kids develop their emotional intelligence and interpersonal relationships, putting them in a better place in life.
Due to
 being exposed to the other sex often, co-ed
schools
also
 play a role in helping build confidence around others
along with
 communication skills which are important skills for later on in life. As an example, it has been shown by Yale that emotional intelligence is mainly cultivated through a person's school years when a diverse group of people to connect with would help immensely in
this
 process.
On the other hand
,
that is
 not to say that single-sex
schools
 are inherently bad. The reason for
this
 is that single-sex
schools
 provide a comfortable and relaxed learning environment, as everyone shares the same mindset here, being of the same gender.
This
 would reduce double standards and stereotypes, allowing kids to focus more on their education and studies.
For example
, research from Stanford pointed out how pupils of single-sex
schools
 outperformed their co-ed counterparts by 5-10% in academic grades.
Also
, aside from the academic aspects of
this
 education system,
schools
 can
also
 provide better mental and wellbeing support, as
due to
 being of the same gender, certain problems unique to each sex can be directly addressed, improving the close-knit bond between teachers and students. In conclusion,
although
 it's easy to say that single-sex education lacks diversity, which plays a role in a child's psychological development, it
also
 acts as a way to provide a better learning environment for students, allowing them to achieve better scores in the future.
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Task Achievement
Your essay presents a clear position throughout, but make sure to fully extend and support your main points in a more balanced way for both sides of the argument to enhance the response. Avoid generalizations and ensure that each paragraph delves deeply into the topic to strengthen the argument presented.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay displays a logical flow of information and ideas, which aids in the coherence of the text. However, you could improve by explicitly using a greater range of cohesive devices and clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph to establish and maintain a stronger argument thread throughout the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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