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Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so sommon that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that some
people
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 think advertising is
ultimate
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 purpose for commercial
business
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businesses
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 to purchase their
products
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 in order to profit. Others believe that advertising helps companies when their
products
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to
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apply
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pay less attention to
buyers
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. In my opinion, an ad is powerful enough to help businessmen because of profit. The essay will be discussed advertising
how
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and how
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 to persuade
buyers
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 to purchase
products
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 and provide relevant answers to the question. Nowadays we can see
ads
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 persuading individuals everywhere
such
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streets
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on streets
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, markets social
medias
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 and so on. They illustrate
products
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 to impact
people
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 to buy them. Especially, commercial owners advertise their
products
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 so as to profit well each year.
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,
people
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 always see
any
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apply
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ads
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 on TV or we hear on the radio when we show or hear some interesting movies or stories. After they think about buying a product. Because
products
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 are informed incredibly.
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people
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 deeply believe these
ads
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.
As a
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result
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 they buy
products
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 that are advertised on TV or radio. Advertising is powerful for business. Some
people
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 believe that an ad helps businessmen when their goods
not
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do not
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 pay attention
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buyers
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to buyers
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.
Therefore
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ads
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 help them to influence
people
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 to buy it.
In other
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words
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people
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 do not want to buy some
products
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 when they are illustrated
social
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on social
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 media
then
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people
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 can buy them because of persuading.
Therefore
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 advertisements impact
buyers
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 significantly as
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products
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product
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 owners frequently use
ads
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 in order to achieve their ultimate goals. In conclusion, some
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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individuals claim that advertising can persuade
people
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 to purchase
the
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apply
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products
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 easily. Other
people
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 believe that only commercial companies cannot sell their goods they use advertisements
due to
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 profits. I have tried to
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 correctly and provide relevant answers to
question
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questions
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.
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