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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullnness of time classroom teachers will betotally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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Technology
 is every moment upgrading and new successful ,potable high-
technology
equipment
 available globally
such
 as tablets .
Also
 everywhere covered effective network systems in most countries .Some
Students
 were capable of handling
such
 new
technology
equipment
 and their parents had better financial backgrounds for supplying new
equipment
 to their children.
However
 some
students
 have
equipment
 that they cannot understand and they should need to correct guidelines,
also
 some average percentage of
students
 are not able to achieve to both of handle
technology
 types of
equipment
 and financial background to withstand new
technology
. I disagreed with the above-given topic and I believe
teachers
 should stay classroom and guide children.
Firstly
 I would like to explain education mean not only
subjects
 knowledge but
also
 must necessary to develop student's social skills and their discipline ,
otherwise
, the
students
 become old they do not understand how to cooperate with others ,it is a bad effect on any culture.
Secondly
 ,some
subjects
 are necessary to correct guidance and proper teaching with feedback
such
 as medical , and engineering
subjects
 because the field studying their knowledge needs to evaluate and give correct feedback to children which can do only by professional
teachers
 .New
technology
this
 student can be used to better education under supervision by
teachers
 I believe
teachers
 should stay behind the
students
 In the classroom for a proper education system in any country.,
Also
teachers
 can build successful persons in our environments with good social skills and good discipline.
Also
 if is
technology
 more reliable to use each person ,handling knowledge if increasing future can reduce
teachers
 in classrooms not all
subjects
 .
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