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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullnness of time classroom teachers will betotally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

#technology #fullnness #time #classroom #teachers
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Technology
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 is every moment upgrading and new successful ,potable high-
technology
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equipment
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 available globally
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 as tablets .
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 everywhere covered effective network systems in most countries .Some
Students
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 were capable of handling
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 new
technology
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equipment
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 and their parents had better financial backgrounds for supplying new
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 to their children.
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 some
students
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 have
equipment
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 that they cannot understand and they should need to correct guidelines,
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 some average percentage of
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 are not able to achieve to both of handle
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 types of
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 and financial background to withstand new
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. I disagreed with the above-given topic and I believe
teachers
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 should stay classroom and guide children.
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 I would like to explain education mean not only
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 knowledge but
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 must necessary to develop student's social skills and their discipline ,
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, the
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 become old they do not understand how to cooperate with others ,it is a bad effect on any culture.
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 ,some
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 are necessary to correct guidance and proper teaching with feedback
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 as medical , and engineering
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 because the field studying their knowledge needs to evaluate and give correct feedback to children which can do only by professional
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 .New
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this
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 student can be used to better education under supervision by
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 I believe
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 should stay behind the
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 In the classroom for a proper education system in any country.,
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teachers
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 can build successful persons in our environments with good social skills and good discipline.
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 if is
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 more reliable to use each person ,handling knowledge if increasing future can reduce
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 in classrooms not all
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 .
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