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You recently broke your leg and your colleagues from work sent you get-well cards and presents. Write a letter to them and: - thank them for supporting you - describe how you spend your time - explain your recovery process

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Dear My Colleagues, I hope you are all doing well at work and are not getting bored without me. I miss all of you very much and regret not being able to keep in touch with you.
That is
 why, I am writing to express my gratitude for the get-well cards and presents you sent me during my recovery from my leg injury. Thank you very much for your support and consideration for me. You all motivate me to cope with the pain in my foot,
as a result
, I am feeling so good these days. During my treatment, I am engaged in checking my emails, obtaining both local and international news, promoting online advertising on my blog
as well as
 spending most of my time with family. I have to admit that I have had some difficulty with taking some injections and as some of the painkillers were a bit more expensive, I had to borrow a large amount of money from my neighbours. I intend to pay them back when I return to work on the forthcoming Monday. Thank you for your courtesy again. I am thrilled to be on your team. Yours sincerely, Theodor Simon
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coherence cohesion
The letter generally follows a clear progression of ideas, although transitions between ideas could be smoother. Consider enhancing the text with cohesive devices that better link sentences and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
While there is a clear greeting and closing, make sure every paragraph has a distinct idea and stays focused on it throughout. Try to avoid mixing different ideas in the same paragraph.
task achievement
The task is completed and most parts are addressed, but further expansion on how you spend your time and more detail on the recovery process would yield a more complete response.
task achievement
The tone is appropriately formal and suitable for a letter to colleagues, conveying gratitude and personal updates effectively.
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