Government investment in the arts, such as music and theatre is a waste of money. Government must invest this money in public services instead. Do you agree or disagree.

Investment in arts, the music industry and theatre is a good thing and will help individuals who are undergoing depression or in a sad mood to regain themselves and be happy because it is like therapy. But I Will suggest and agree on the government to invest the money in public services
such
as literacy, transportation and
also
surveillance. The next paragraph will explain more on why the government need to deploy the money into literacy, transportation and preservation with examples. Leadership should contribute more to the education of the young ones, cause it will make individuals attain a particular stage in life that will reduce the rate of bad gangs which are terrorising The nation.
For instance
, most of the youth that didn't go to school end up becoming bad boys, causing trouble around, and drinking all kinds of stuff
due to
the fact that they are ignorant of the junk and
due to
the fact that they are not knowledgeable about it. meanwhile providing a well standard place for learning helps students to assimilate faster and more conveniently.
while
some are because of school fees which are more expensive And they could not cater for themselves. and might affect or turn them to join bad gangs. The government
also
should provide a means of surveillance for the citizens so that they won't be any casualties.
for example
, in A place where there's a lack of preservation, there will all form if substance happens e.g. break-in, rapping, kidnapping and assault. looting has been one of the major goods every citizen fights for. when there's a lack of insurance there's bank looting and house theft Even with those that are managing themselves. with these ,issues there's no peace of mind in society and it affects the individual living there.
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also
rapping has been one of the most rampant gear or issues in my country because there's always a case of rap in the district. which
also
affect our young girl life and has
also
turned them into other things in society because there's no one to help. In,conclusion I will suggest that our executive could fund more public services so as to reduce the risk to the citizen and
also
to bring good citizens in terms of teaching.
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