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Many customs and traditional ways of behaviors are no longer relevant to the modern life and not worth keeping. Do you agree or disagree?

There is an ongoing debate about whether
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 and traditional
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 of
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 are still relevant in today's modern life.
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 some argue that many
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 are outdated and no longer serve a purpose, others believe that these traditions are an essential part of our culture and should be preserved. In my opinion, I agree with the latter group and believe that many
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 are worth keeping.
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,
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 are an essential part of our cultural identity. They help us understand where we came from, and they provide us with a sense of belonging. Our traditions are what make us unique, and they connect us to our heritage.
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, the celebration of festivals and ceremonies is a tradition deeply ingrained in many cultures. These events bring people together and provide a platform to exchange ideas and share cultural experiences.
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, traditional
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 are essential in promoting cultural diversity and social cohesion.
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, many
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 and traditional
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 have practical benefits that are still relevant today.
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, the practice of eating together as a family is a tradition that has been passed down through generations.p, and it has been shown to have many benefits, including improved communication and stronger family relationships.
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, many
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 and traditional
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 of
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 that promote respect, honesty, and integrity are still essential in modern life. These values are universally
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 as positive, and they help to foster strong communities and relationships. In conclusion, even though some argue that
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 and traditional
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 of
behaviour
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 are outdated and no longer relevant, I believe that they are an essential part of our culture and should be preserved.

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task response
Give a clear reason for your view and add one or two specific examples that show the impact of keeping traditions.
task response
Balance the view with a short look at why some customs may not be good, then explain why you still think they should stay.
coherence
In writing, use short sentences. Link ideas with words like First, Also, Finally to help flow.
coherence
Keep one idea per paragraph and end with a line that connects to the next idea.
coherence
Check for small typo and spelling, like generations.p and keep the spell of behaviour/behavior consistent.
strength
The writer shows a clear view that traditions should be kept.
strength
Easy to read and uses a calm tone with simple words.
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