The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010

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The assigned map expounds information about the road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

Overall

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it is clear that

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there is a number of changes have been taken in every direction, which helps the hospital to modernize.

To begin

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with, it seems that in 2007, the bus stop was located alone on the east side

whereas

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it has been replaced by the roundabout in 2010.

Along with

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, if taken at the area

that is

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admitted in the map, which names car park : staff and public.

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, the car park shifted towards the upper direction in the northeast.

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this

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, a ring road and public car park remained untouched in 2010. Probing

further

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, there were new developments that have taken place in the centre and south directions. Those were rounded roads that helps to minimise the traffic and the left side of hospital RD and there was a bus station that was published in 2010,respectively.

Moreover

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, other things like the ring road and the city hospital remained the same in both years.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.

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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

177 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

accessibility
dual carriageway
roundabout
traffic flow
multi-story car park
green spaces
pedestrian provisions
footpaths
traffic signals
construction phase
ambulances
carriageway expansion
traffic congestion
pedestrian crossings
urban planning
infrastructure development

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