discuss the advantages and disadvantages of using social networking applications.

No doubt , nowadays everyone loves to use social media to earn money and popularity in
this
world .
Nevertheless
,
due to
spam and make
distance
Add an article
the distance
show examples
for
parents
, it
Add a missing verb
is
show examples
very
hand
Correct your spelling
hard
show examples
to ignore the
demirts
Correct your spelling
demerits
of
this
statement. In
this
essay
Add a comma
,essay
show examples
i
Change the capitalization
I
show examples
will
expalin
Correct your spelling
explain
the pros and cons of using
internet
Add an article
the internet
show examples
in their daily routine To commence with
benefits
Correct article usage
the benefits
show examples
of using social sites
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
people
gets
Change the verb form
get
show examples
chance
Correct article usage
a chance
show examples
to make their name and fame at
worldwide
Correct article usage
a worldwide
show examples
level .Needless to say ,
thesedays
Correct your spelling
these days
individuals mostly share their talent videos like dance , cooking and so on ,on the internet .So that , they can show the art with numerous
people
at once time and earn huge
amount
Fix the agreement mistake
amounts
show examples
of money and name together as well.
Furthermore
, in
a
Correct article usage
the
show examples
current time period, famous
people
select their actors on these
video
Fix the agreement mistake
videos
show examples
for their movies and advertisement purposes .
Therefore
,
people
can make images in
this
world very
easy
Change the word
easily
show examples
with the help of social applications. Despite these merits ,there are ample drawbacks
of
Change preposition
to
show examples
this
motion
such
as
people
becoming addicted and staying away
fromm
Correct your spelling
from
their
parents
at the same time .First and foremost ,
people
can easy hacker
their
Change preposition
into their
show examples
account
Fix the agreement mistake
accounts
show examples
and transfer their data and money from one bank to another within
the
Correct article usage
a
show examples
second by just having little bit
information
Change preposition
of information
show examples
about the bank .
As a result
,
people
can become bank debts.
Moreover
, when adults become addicted towards their mobile applications , they start ignoring their
parents
and skip their
meal
Fix the agreement mistake
meals
show examples
as well .
Hence
, their family bond becomes weak and they face many health problems orderly in
upcoming
Correct article usage
the upcoming
show examples
days .
To conclude
,
although
using social media is
better
Add an article
a better
the better
show examples
way to get a chance to show their talent in
this
world ,
however
Add the comma(s)
,however
show examples
the negative aspects are more as they become addicted and stay away from their
parents
which is not good for their relationship in future.
Submitted by kirandkaur131 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

Learn how to write high-scoring essays with powerful words.
Download Free PDF and start improving you writing skills today!
What to do next:
Look at other essays: