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Some people say that now we can see films on our phones or tablets, there is no need to go to the cinema. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays,
people
 are widely using tech
gadgets
 in their daily lives ranging from educational purposes to entertainment. Some
people
 argue that we can stop going to the
cinema
 for
movies
 as we can watch an endless number of
movies
 on our
gadgets
. I have not convinced of
this
 idea and still believe the movie theatre will still play the best choice to enjoy high-quality films. Watching
movies
 on your phones and tablets has some attractive points.
First,
with internet access, anyone can browse movie content at no or nominal cost.
Second,
when we realize the drama doesn’t meet our expectations, we can stop watching instantly.
Third,
it is very convenient to access a pool of films and
movies
 at any location and time which is very attractive to
people
 in
this
 modern hectic world.
Finally
, we can re-watch our favourite scene and pause a moment to refill our movie-time snacks.
Therefore
, we can clearly see that the affordability and flexibility of accessing
movies
 on
gadgets
 attract some attention from moviegoers.
However
, the feeling of being in a movie theatre is incomparable to its substitute option. The sound and image quality on small screens can’t compete with those on the big screen display and Dolby sound system. And many
people
 feel that it’s more enjoyable to see certain
movies
such
 as special effects and action
movies
.
Similarly
, we can watch special makings of 3D and animated films only in technologically advanced
cinema
.
For example
, many
people
 will opt to see Jurassic World 3D film in a theatre rather than on their mobile because of the different qualities offered.
Thus
, it is worth your time and money to go to the
cinema
 to enjoy exceptional quality content.
To conclude
, it is an undeniable fact that a lot of
people
 are using phones and
gadgets
 for their entertainment, but the
cinema
 will not disappear
due to
 the exceptional quality content it offers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Convenience
  • Mobile Viewing
  • Cost-efficient
  • Time-efficient
  • Personalized experience
  • Immersive
  • Cinematic experience
  • Surround sound
  • Collective experience
  • Technical superiority
  • Sensory experience
  • Social hubs
  • Cultural events
  • Distractions
  • Preservation
  • Filmmaking art
  • Cinematographic nuances
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