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Some people think we should stop building library because it waste of Government revenue. What extent do you agree or diagree

#people #library #waste #government #revenue #diagree
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Nowadays, competition has increased a lot compared to the past, and education and knowledge play a major role in one's life. And to gain and achieve that expertise in the field
library
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 is the best friend for an individual.
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, some groups of thinkers deny that constructing a
library
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 is a waste of government funds. I think in a reverse manner and disagree
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 the given statement. My inclination is justified in the paragraphs below. Out of all the arguments, the strongest one to prove my point is , the
library
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 has a vast scale of
books
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 from each and every field we ask for.
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 to that, it increases your imagination and logical skills. The reason behind
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, we can find a book on the same topic by
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 author and all have different views, opinions and a different way of thinking.
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, it is not only for the target audience, all age groups from different fields can visit and take advantage,
this
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 includes kids, youths , and senior citizens as well. There is a common saying, "
Books
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 are man's best friend". In ,fact
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 is true because
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 reading
books
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 gives you peace and clams your mind in
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 world full of chaos. And reading in the
library
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 itself has a different vibe. Research shows
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 an individual with a habit of collecting
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 and reading
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 less stressed
as well as
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 has a healthy lifestyle.
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, people always argue that government should stop wasting money
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 making libraries. The reason for
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 is
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 maintenance, often the pages in
books
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 are torn or the writing is dull as the
books
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 are old.
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, the
library
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 is the best place to find rats, who eat
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 and makes
it
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 useless. In a nutshell, it can be said that despite
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some lack
in
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 maintenance work, the importance and need of
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library
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 can never be overlooked.
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