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People are living in a “throw-away society”, using things for a short time and then throwing them away. What are the causes of this? What problems does it lead to?

Nowadays
people
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 tend to
use
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 objects for a short-term period and
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 throw them away. It is obvious that there are root causes behind
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 phenomenon, and not using commodities for a long time may lead to devastating effects both on
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 and our environment. There are two main reasons why
individuals
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 do not
use
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 products for longer periods. The first reason is consumption. Because there are many advertisements in which the companies persuade
people
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 to buy more, many
individuals
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 buy things that they do not need and dispose of items which still can be used. A good illustration of
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 is that
people
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 buy more items of clothing than they really need and throw away ones that are completely new. The second reason is
people
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 have a tendency to compete with each other.
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,
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 of thinking about their convenience, some
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 are obsessed to show that they are better than others.
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, they do not
use
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 their belonging for a longer period as they think to retaining their commodities makes them less perfect in the eyes of others.
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,
this
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 trend might cause severe consequences which affect not only
people
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 but
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 the environment. The more
individuals
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 throw away their belonging, the more their future will be in danger.
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, buying more products will result in fewer savings, so when
individuals
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 reach their retirement, they do not have enough money to take care of themselves.
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, producing more waste will pose a serious danger to the environment. Take tons of waste which are buried in landfills every year
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 of
consumptionism
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consumption
consumptions
 as an example; if humans continue to do
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, we will put different species of animals and plants on the verge of extinction.
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, many forests will disappear as a product of
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 behaviour. In conclusion, it is better to
use
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 our belonging for a longer period and not throw them away after using them a couple of times.
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 many TV programmes encourage the public to buy new stuff and get rid of old ones, the community should control its desire to do so
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 behaviour is dangerous for sustainable life on the earth.

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