There are social, medical and technical problems associated with the mobile phone. Do you agree that the problems outweigh the benefits of mobile phone.

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No doubt, nowadays everything is available on the cell phone ,
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the question is that a number of problems are caused by
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like relationships broken ,health
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and so on .
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, I agree with
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statement that the demerits are more than merits and I will briefly explain it in upcoming paragraphs. To commence with benefits of
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trend that these day people mostly complete their tasks with the help of their gadgets
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sitting at home
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as online shopping, they can order fast food , send files from one place to another and do much other work and they can pay payment online as well.Needless to say ,
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public can save
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and during that
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they can finish their other tasks .
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, working women usually order food from outside whenever they have less
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to make food and in between they can easily do other work to save
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as clearing and dusting .Adding more , school-going students can easily download their books in pdf form On their mobile and they can generally do their study anytime without carrying any book with them .
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,many videos are available on the internet by which they can learn about anything .
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, the smartphone is the best way to enhance knowledge and save
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. Despite these advantages,there are ample problems which cause by these gadgets like health issues ,social and others.
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,in the current days , people spend maximum hours on their phones
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watching Netflix, Hotstar and playing video games ,
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, they forget to give some
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to their loved ones and at
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the bond with family members
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becomes weak and
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they start living separately.
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, people avoid face-to-face communication as they send text and voice messages to their friends,by social networking
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reduces as they just spend
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on their phones .
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, they faced many problems like eyesight weak, obesity,depression and anxiety because they mostly strike on their screens and are less aware of their surroundings .
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,mobile phones are the main obstacle in the modern generation. In conclusion,
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smartphone creates multiple issues
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folks like ,
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also
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cannot deny and helps to save
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and energy .
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,it is the best platform to study any subject.
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