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Smacking children is the best form of the discipline. To what extend do you agree?

#children #form #discipline
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Nowadays smacking
children
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 to bring them up is an effective procedure among today's
parents
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 and their
children
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's behaviour to live appropriately. I slightly agree that there is no
way
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 to raise
children
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 well apart from using physical punishments.
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 essay will argue that controlling
children
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's behaviour by some punishments.
To begin
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 with, hitting
children
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 has become an easy
way
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 for
parents
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 to discipline their
children
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. Some
parents
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 think that the only
way
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 to control their
children
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 is to spank them. Because they think that if they do not smack their
children
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 they may go into bad ways and will surely repeat
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 mistakes.
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, if the
children
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 do something wrong to their
parents
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 , they can solve it by smacking them. But it can affect a child's psyche and he can develop bad feelings towards his
parents
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. But on the other ,hand spanking
children
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 can significantly improve their upbringing.There are many better methods to raise
children
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 than hitting them. Because hitting
children
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 can have a negative impact on their lives and cause them to fall into bad ways.
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, if
parents
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 hit their
children
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,
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 can have a bad effect on their psyche, which can lead to
children
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 running away from home and joining bad people.
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, if the
children
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 are explained in a good
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 and told not to repeat
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 mistake. I think it is better than smacking them. It is good for
children
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's future.
To sum up
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, some
parents
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 may think that their
children
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 should be spanked for upbringing but as I told you there are positive and negative sides to smacking them. In my ,mind pros definitely outweigh the cons.
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