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In spite of advances made in agriculture, many people around the world still go hungry. Why is this the case? What can be done about this problem?

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Many
people
 live below the poverty line .when they have breakfast they won't be able to eat other meals that in case if they even get the chance to eat during the entire day . On the other side,
people
 have some problems choosing what to eat first and what dessert to take. I am going to put attention to
this
 crucial case trying to focus on the problems and the possible solutions. We know that an individual can get filled only his three meals without snacks.
However
,we used to eat far more than our needs .
also
, we regularly buy a lot of things out of our requirements especially
food
 .
this
 leads to an increase in the obesity rate and
food
 shortage since we put a lot of effort into the
food
 industry by taking more than our needs.
this
 shortage mainly appears in the area where starvation is dominant .
Also
 the bad distribution of resources between countries and individuals. If we match our meals with our needs no one will suffer from hunger.the governments should take responsibility by building investment
food
 boxes to support the
people
 who are below the poverty line . Individuals should participate in donations and try to keep their excess
food
 in the right place and donate it to the
people
 who need it most.
Otherwise
, there will be serious negative effects .
For example
 ,plenty of criminal cases were based on
food
 needs which could be solved easily by
food
 donation In conclusion,everyone has his role in
this
 battle . Give your
food
 to support your community.the governments should pay a lot of attention to
this
 catastrophe. hunger could lead to many problems that can affect the community and the individuals.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inequality
  • distribution
  • access to resources
  • climate change
  • natural disasters
  • political factors
  • economic factors
  • agricultural practices
  • infrastructure
  • transportation
  • population growth
  • education
  • knowledge
  • food waste
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