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The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn.

The diagram below shows how ethanol fuel is produced from corn.
#ethanol #fuel #corn
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The flowchart illustrates the
process
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 of manufacturing
ethanol
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 fuel from corn.
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, there are 9 distinct stages in
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, commencing with getting corn and culminating with transporting it to customers.
Besides
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, preparing
ethanol
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 requires specialized equipment with water. The initial phases of
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 pictorial diagram all happen
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 huge corporations.
At the first
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stage
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 in the
process
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, the corn is stored in containers and it is milled in order to prepare
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 another
stage
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. Once milling
corns
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corn
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 are cooked for 4 hours, it is fermented for 2 days as it is
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stage
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 of
this
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process
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. In the following
stage
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 fermented
product
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products
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 in separated
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 2
phrases
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: liquid and solid products.
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liquid
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 product is purified. After liquating
ethanol
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 is
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 for 5 hours. Over the course of
8th
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stage
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 purified
ethanol
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 is stored. The final step involves carrying the ready products to special tracks and transporting them to customers
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, ethanol, stage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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