Most people in the world have to work to earn a living. However, many people work only for the financial gain that it involves, and not for any other rewards that a job can offer. What do you think the main consideration when deciding what job to take should be?

In my opinion, the most important factor
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deciding what job to take highly depends on
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area of interest.
However
, it is not guaranteed that your particular area of interest will pay you enough to
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your basic needs. For
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example, few decades a
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banks used to hire people who are smart with numbers and good at customer
services
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. Things have evolved in recent years and with
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of technology,
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does most of the things.
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, banks now look for people
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good with customer
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to retain their
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customers
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. By
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I am trying to
proove
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prove
that one needs to upgrade in their job to stand with
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needed to survive in the job market.
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, with
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population in the
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one needs to stand out
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by mastering a skill which very few have in their area of interest.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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