In many countries , a small number of people earn extremely higher salaries same people believe that this is good for country , but others think that governments should not allow salaries above a certain level. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many individuals believe that governments should introduce a maximum wage
while
others think
considerable
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higher salaries
useful
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are useful
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for
country
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the country
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and
residents
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its residents
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. I personally believe that
employees
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employees'
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remuneration should be capped at a certain level. Many
people
have different views about whether governments should introduce a maximum wage . On the one
hand
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there are various reasons why it might be considered beneficial to allow
people
to
paid
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extremely higher salaries. If
company
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a company
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offer a huge salary for
employees
they can attract the most talented workers in their field to work for only them . So it might be useful for companies.
For example
,
the
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a
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company which is producing
variety
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a variety
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of modern technology can
attracted
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attract
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employees
the best programmers in
this
way . So
this
company is modern all over the world.
Furthermore
, these
well paid
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to
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apply
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employees
may give a higher motivation to work hard and
therefore
drive their business successfully paying high salaries nearly beneficial to everyone.
On the other
hand
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I agree
with
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that there should be a maximum wage . By intolerance limited wages
people
actively equality in society. Today , everyone should have equal rights in society.
For instance
, almost in every Factories
employees
always
working
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work
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harder rather than bosses but bosses earn a high salary than simple
employees
.
This
condition is unfair
for
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poor
people
.
This
may
will
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well
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cause
in
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people
would lose their homes and jobs even
they
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won't to
migreat
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migrate
another
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to another
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city or country .
This
is because they are looking for
better paying
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better-paying
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jobs. In conclusion, I believe that the same monthly payment for everyone is more beneficial for the country and the population.
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  • incentivize
  • discrepancy
  • inequality
  • social cohesion
  • equitable distribution
  • wealth concentration
  • talent retention
  • global competitiveness
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  • innovate
  • government intervention
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