People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life.

It is true that rather many involving state, available a problem with
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in quality of air and water ūüĆä from both industrial and building
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an important role in the life of the population. In my opinion,
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because
of
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a
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waste from
factories
and people do not protect
nature
and solutions lie in
factories
should be reduced and a fine must be paid for damage to
nature
. It is undeniable that there are some serious reasons
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this
theme in terms of
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garbage
from works and individuals
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not ūüöę save
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. Regarding the former, many people are desecrating
nature
by building ūüŹę private
factories
. It is
also
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factories
that
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have not ūüöę bottom of the garbage ūüöģ coming out of them is turning drinking water into poison and drying up rivers, whether we do not stop
this
it will result lead to unimaginable bad consequences. If the medium is dead,
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we
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also
conk because we cannot live and do anything without
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temporary
. The other major points of folk do not advocate temper.
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they smoke and it poisons the air, we ourselves breathe from it. Tree ūüĆī is one of
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nature
's wonders that cleans the air but we are
also
polluting it for our
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.
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can lead to our children and ourselves being sick like an allergy, a repaid ageing,
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. The several actions that could be taken to solve the problems described above.
Firstly
, a simple solution would be forfeit to
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for harm to
nature
then
pais start saving grain because of penalty nowadays lour one of the most sensitive points is money.
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factories
should be decreasing, only
then
we can keep the character and kind can live for many more years. If we take care of inwardness, it will live for another million years and our descendants will see what we saw.
To conclude
, various measures can be taken to tackle the problem which is caused by the above reasons.
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