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People who live in large cities face a range of problems in their daily life.

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 population lives in urban areas.
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 activity with prosperity.Urban dwellers actually have to experience various difficulties. From my perspective, governments should use counter-urbanization as a measure to ease
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the aforementioned problems. On the one
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 thing is for a violent crime to occur.There must be a culprit and a victim.In a highly populated area, the risk of encountering a mob is much higher than that of a small town .
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, if the culprit feels protected by the anonymity that a large
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. In my opinion, to tackle the issue above, to tackle the issue above, governments should promote migration from urban areas to rural ones.
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 dwellers their reasons to stay in urban places,
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 as to enjoy education and job opportunities.
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 is why need to step in because only they can introduce rural development policies. In conclusion, crime of the various problems of urban life . I believe that
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 migration promoted by governments appropriate solution for those issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urbanization
  • metropolis
  • commute
  • public transportation
  • gridlock
  • air pollution
  • noise pollution
  • expensive housing
  • exorbitant prices
  • work-life balance
  • recreation areas
  • parks and gardens
  • criminal activities
  • security measures
  • density
  • neighborhood
  • public amenities
  • healthcare facilities
  • educational institutions
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