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"Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the world as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion."

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Nowadays,
people
 have lots of options related to food. Many of them avoid using
fish
 and
meat
 in their
diet
 because they think
that is
 good for their health and has a positive impact on the
environment
 as well. In my point of view, adopting a vegetarian
diet
 is beneficial for a healthy lifestyle and the
environment
, but eating
fish
 and
meat
 is more important because of their nutritional value.
To begin
 with, some
people
 argue that a
diet
 without
fish
 and
meat
 will give them a nice body and
also
 reduce the environmental issue.
According to
 vegetarians, by removing
fish
 and
meat
 from their daily meals, they may maintain a nice body and avoid various diseases. The amount of fat and cholesterol in these kinds of food may bring them chronic illnesses
such
 as obesity and heart disease.
For example
, the fat guy is thought that he
is
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overweight because he eats too much
fish
 and
meat
instead
 of vegetables.
Secondly
, consuming
fish
 and
meat
 will make a great impact on the
environment
 indirectly. As human consumption of
fish
 and
meat
 increases, the level of deforestation increases.
People
 tend to destroy the forest to make more space for breeding and
this
 causes greenhouse gasses which makes a huge impact on the
environment
.
For example
, since cow farming is popular, cows make lots of carbon dioxide in the atmosphere and it impacts our
environment
 a lot. In my opinion,
meat
 and
fish
 play a vital role in providing our growing process with vitamins and nutrition. Both are the main sources of protein and provide a significant amount of animal fat as well. They contain high amounts of nutrition
as well as
 various kinds of minerals that are advantageous for our health.
As a consequence
 of not having
meat
 and
fish
 in daily meals,
people
 will not gain proteins and fats so they will not have enough energy for their daily activities.
For instance
, some of my acquaintances try to follow a vegetarian
diet
 for a few days, and they always feel exhausted and can not do anything well.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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