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Some people said they can learn something from the traveling , and some people said no, discussing the both sides

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It is a common belief that
people
 argue about learning from their travelling.
People
 prefer to learn about culture, new knowledge or history by travelling aboard
especially
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 from the family with kids. They could explore by visiting different
kinds
 of museums and traditional buildings
,
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 and participating in their festivals activities. And a group of
people
 with opposite opinions. On top of that, the batch of
people
 is convinced that they can't learn from travelling. There are several reasons.
Firstly
, they believe the information is becoming transparent, the culture and history that
people
 could browse the internet or get the information from books.
Secondly
, because of globalization, travellers can enjoy familiar experiences from various locations.
For instance
, they can eat Japanese food in China, America or Europe, confusing
people
 about the country's features.
Besides
, communication on online platforms become popular, and
people
 easily meet a friend from different countries to understand their habits or lifestyle of them. In my opinion,
people
 can learn from going to other countries. It is true that some
kinds
 of information are easy to get from the internet or book or other platforms.
However
, I firmly believe that
people
 would get the knowledge from travelling. Whatever the preparation before travelling, we have to check what
kinds
 of food or places are worth trying or going. During the process,
people
 have to check different
kinds
 of recommendations from the websites.
Moreover
,
people
 had to know some culture about the countries for the
respectation
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expectation
resection
. For these reasons, it is preferable to learn from travelling.
To sum up
, travelling is a popular topic for a number of
people
.
People
 would love to find out the special of the country.
People
 could learn how to communicate with the local
people
, to explore their past, and the mordant ideas which we can't experience from the internet or the materials.
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