Your city council is planning to pull down one of the historic buildings in your town because they do not have funds to renovate it. As a citizen, you do not want it to happen. Write a letter to the city council. In your letter, • say what the importance of this historic building is • mention why it should be renovated rather than pull down • suggest a plan to raise funds and maintain the building in the future

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Dear Sir/Madam, I read in the newspaper about your plans to demolish the Castle because of the lack of funds to do the renovation. I would like to

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you to plan to maintain it rather than pull it down. As we all know

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castle is the main remarkable monument for our town and as it is about 200 years old. which reminds us of our ancient traditions and culture.

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place is not only related to our culture but

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it is a famous tourist attraction for outsider visitors. which gives many job opportunities to our townspeople. Despite the age of

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castle, still is in good condition.

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, there are so many tools

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utensils and other household items kept in better condition which could only be possible in

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historical building. So, I would recommend planning to maintain it

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of demolishing it. If it

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in the upcoming days, our future generation

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never learn about our ancient traditions and culture. I can suggest you arrange some campaign about collecting the funds from the public and there are many builders in town who can take responsibility for the maintenance. People can contribute to saving

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historical place and can arrange for a volunteering team could take care of it. I hope you will consider it a serious matter and change your plans soon. Yours faithfully, Mandeep Singh

Submitted by mandeepsinghsony2022 on Sat May 27 2023

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task response

Make sure to fully address all parts of the task prompt, including the importance of the building, reasons for renovation, and a plan to raise funds.

coherence and cohesion

Organize the letter in a more coherent and cohesive manner, including using appropriate paragraphing and a clearer introduction and conclusion.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

235 words

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