Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Many people think that parents should allow their
children
to make decisions
on everything, such
as food, clothes and entertainment. But this
makes them only think about themselves and it has an effect on society which leads to them thinking just about themselves. Other people say that it is vital for children
to make decisions
about issues that affect their life
, namely choosing a major university.
The subjects that children
should make their own decisions
have some negative impact on their lives. The main disadvantage is that children
's brain
Fix the agreement mistake
brains
not
grow enough to make some Add a missing verb
do not
decisions
, also
they cannot decide what is good for them and what is not. For example
, as we know fast food is one of the most delicious foods, and almost all people love it. But fast food does not have any healthy ingredients. So, if children
eat it every day, it is highly likely that it will cause serious bad effects namely, obesity and high blood pressure. Therefore
, it is not good
idea to allow Add an article
a good
children
to make every decisions
that they want.
Change to a singular noun
decision
On the other hand
, parents should allow children
to make important decisions
in their life
. This
makes children
more independent and learn
to take responsibility for their choices. Change the verb form
learns
For instance
, one of them
most important issues that Correct your spelling
the
children
have to be taken when they grow up,
is choosing Remove the comma
apply
major
university. Because Add an article
a major
with
that Change preposition
of
decision
they start their work career path. So, they have Add a comma
,decision
take
Fix the infinitive
to take
the
responsibility Correct article usage
apply
of
their Change preposition
for
decisions
. Moreover
, if they know they have to take responsibility for their decisions
, they might make choices wisely.
In conclusion, allowing children
to make decisions
on their own on every day
matters like choosing what they eat, Correct your spelling
everyday
wear
, Correct word choice
and wear
it
has a negative effect on their Correct pronoun usage
apply
life
. However
, it is good for children
to make some important decisions
about their life
. And I agree with this
statement it helps them to be more independent and more responsible.Submitted by shahab_e2020 on
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