Some people believe that allowing children to make their own choices on everyday (such as food, clothes and entertainment) is likely to result in a society of individuals who only think about their own wishes. Other people believe that it is important for children to make decisions about matters that affect them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Many people think that parents should allow their
children
to make
decisions
on everything,
such
as food, clothes and entertainment. But
this
makes them only think about themselves and it has an effect on society which leads to them thinking just about themselves. Other people say that it is vital for
children
to make
decisions
about issues that affect their
life
, namely choosing a major university. The subjects that
children
should make their own
decisions
have some negative impact on their lives. The main disadvantage is that
children
's
brain
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not
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grow enough to make some
decisions
,
also
they cannot decide what is good for them and what is not.
For example
, as we know fast food is one of the most delicious foods, and almost all people love it. But fast food does not have any healthy ingredients. So, if
children
eat it every day, it is highly likely that it will cause serious bad effects namely, obesity and high blood pressure.
Therefore
, it is not
good
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idea to allow
children
to make every
decisions
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that they want.
On the other hand
, parents should allow
children
to make important
decisions
in their
life
.
This
makes
children
more independent and
learn
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to take responsibility for their choices.
For instance
, one of
them
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most important issues that
children
have to be taken when they grow up
,
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is choosing
major
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a major
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university. Because
with
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that
decision
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they start their work career path. So, they have
take
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the
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responsibility
of
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their
decisions
.
Moreover
, if they know they have to take responsibility for their
decisions
, they might make choices wisely. In conclusion, allowing
children
to make
decisions
on their own on
every day
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matters like choosing what they eat,
wear
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,
it
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has a negative effect on their
life
.
However
, it is good for
children
to make some important
decisions
about their
life
. And I agree with
this
statement it helps them to be more independent and more responsible.
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