The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (C02) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy and Portugal between 1967 and 2007.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph provides information about CO2
emissions
by people in four different countries (
UK
,
Sweden
, Italy,
Portugal
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and Portugal
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) from 1967 to 2007. The CO2
emissions
experienced an upwards trend in general.
However
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,However
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it tended to decrease in the
UK
and
Sweden
.
In
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At
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the beginning of the period,
Portugas
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Portugal
was the
lowes
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lowest
show examples
of
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in
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producing CO2
emissions
, but in the end, Portugal had
same
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the same
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result as
Sweden
(approximately 5 metric
tonnes
). In 1967, Italy was nearly 4 metric
tonnes
and began to rise up to almost 8 metric
tonnes
within 30 years.
Moreover
, Italy showed a steady movement from 1997 to 2007. In the year
of
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apply
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1967, The
UK
and
Sweden
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Sweden's
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emissions
were 8.7 metric
tonnes
and 11 metric
tonnes
respectively.
Sweden
showed a constant decrease (up to 22%) over the period,
while
the
UK
had
a
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apply
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significant growth until 1997.
Moreover
, the
UK
experienced a
downwards
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downward
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trend and was outraced (
on
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by
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7 metric
tonnes
) by Italy
at
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in
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1989.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, uk, sweden, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.

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