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Plan A below shows a health centre in 2005. Plan B shows the same place in the present day.

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The maps above give information about the expansion of a health
center
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 from 2005 to
present
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. In general, there were significant changes in both the exterior of the
center
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as well as
 the interior
such
 as the garden
became
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 smaller
whereas
 the
center
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centre
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 was expanded bigger to the
north western
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northwestern
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 side of the building. On the outside, the
north western
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 side of the garden was narrowed
due to
 the introduction of the minor operations
room
.
Beside
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 that, 2 gates of the garden which were located in the
south west
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southwest
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 and
south east
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southeast
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 were relocated to other places, one was relocated to the
north west
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northwest
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 and the other was moved 90
degree
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 to the east from the origin.
Also
, the car parking was widened in order to have enough space for 30 cars. On the inside, the
center
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centre
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 was renovated with new
rooms
 and other utilities. First of all, the entrance was relocated to the
south west
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southwest
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 corner of the building which was originally placed in front of the parking
area
. After entering the entrance, right
on
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in
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 the right-hand corner was the children’s play
area
 accompanied by the reception desk directly opposite
to
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it.
In addition
, the capacity of the
rooms
were
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was
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 narrowed to save space for the common
area
,
along
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and along
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 the common
area
 were placed the seats for clients. Another observation is the number of consulting
rooms
were
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 expanded to 4
rooms
 which
was
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were
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 only 3
rooms
 in 2005,
therefore
 the position of all the
rooms
were
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also
 changed, a new minor operations
room
 was built between the office and the physiotherapy
room
, the consulting
room
 1 was relocated to the opposite side of the minor operations
room
 and the consulting
room
 2 was placed next to it
while
 the original position of the consulting
room
 1 and 2 were replaced by the consulting
room
 3 and 4
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health centre
  • renovation
  • modernization
  • layout
  • consultation rooms
  • treatment rooms
  • pharmacy
  • accessibility
  • parking facilities
  • disabled access
  • technological advancements
  • preventive care
  • rehabilitation services
  • administrative offices
  • community needs
  • public health policy
  • expansion
  • reduction
  • entrance area
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